六耳：恰似你的溫柔 中譯英

引用 六耳 2011-7-19 10:34 PM

本帖最后由 六耳 于 2011-7-19 11:37 PM 编辑

我又修改了一下,

Somewhere along the line
You and I become shattered visage
It was hard to utter a goodbye
to let you go, and let you go

Time like this was harsh
But tearless on our faces
yes, when love came in stealth
let farewell commence in peace

To this day
I can not stop thinking back
think about you and the past

Wonder when will the breeze stir the sea
For the breakage of the wave touches
like the tenderness from thee.  

引用 星光 2011-7-20 12:53 AM

译的真不错，喜欢！

这是我喜欢的一首歌。

引用 六耳 2011-7-22 07:46 PM

我妹的翻譯:  

A day in a month of a year, like a shattered face
Farewell bid in speechlessness
Let go all the past into deep distance

It is no easy task
Yet none of us let go of tears
Let it come as feather
Let it leave in breeze

Year and year pass 'till this day
I cannot stop the past say
Missing you and old life's sake

May that ocean breeze flow again
Just for that hand of waves
Gentle as your tenderness

引用 六耳 2011-7-22 07:52 PM

例外一份英文譯詞引自：台灣百年歌樂經典。大門文化（1996）(來源:  http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/jw!j2 ... xy2/article?mid=128)

Some day in some month of some year
It was just like a smashed face
It's difficult to say goodbye
Let everything go far away

It's not an easy matter
But both of us didn't weep
Let it come to us placidly
Let it go away merrily

Year in and year out
I can't stop missing you
Missing you and the old times

I wish the sea breeze can blow again
Just for arousing waves
Just like your tenderness

我妹的英文比較好, 他翻的比較上口, 有韻.  我的, 譯的有點不大符合信達雅, 而且, 還是不大押韻...  我還是說, 一首詩裡, you, thee 共存, 怪怪的...  lol  

引用 云天 2011-7-30 01:17 PM

都不错.  你妹翻的确实比较上口. 后院 taichi 翻的也有趣.

凑个热闹,  只翻第一节:

某年某月的某一天　就像一張破碎的臉
難以開口道再見　就讓一切走遠

Sometime ago there was once a day
Like a shattered face fading away
Too hard to say goodbye to yesterday
Nothing gold can stay

引用 云天 2011-7-30 01:18 PM

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引用 六耳 2011-7-30 09:43 PM

翻譯的唯一好處是, 讓我更仔細體會一下這首歌詞的涵義.  以前只是哼啊哼, 沒啥多想.  

引用 Reader86 2011-9-12 08:54 AM

六耳 发表于 2011-7-30 10:43 PM
翻譯的唯一好處是, 讓我更仔細體會一下這首歌詞的涵義.  以前只是哼啊哼, 沒啥多想.  
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听起来六耳很浪漫呀。

选得好，翻得也好！

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